Wednesday, August 02, 2017

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Post 1576. Wednesday August 2

Friday Fictioneers


I left flowers on her desk. I didn’t leave a note. They’re her favourites so she’ll know they're from me, and she’ll get the message without me spelling it out.

They’ll probably end up in the bin though. She accused me of something; said she had proof. But I persuaded her it was nonsense. I felt guilty afterwards. Not for what I did, he deserved it, but for denying it. 

So I left flowers on her desk. Her favourites. Well, I could hardly take them to his funeral, could I? Anyway, I’ll be miles away by then. 




Thank you, Rochelle, for hosting Friday Fictioneers, also Dale Rogerson for the photo prompt.









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58 comments:

  1. "You" better scoot fast if she has the proof.

    Great story! Come see mine here.

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  2. Revenge on a love rival perhaps? Best not to leave a confession in writing, can't convict you for delivering flowers!

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  3. Dear Keith,

    She'll know, but will the police? He'd best run fast.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

    https://rochellewisoff.com/2017/08/02/4-august-2017/

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    1. He's not stopping to find out! Thanks Rochelle

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  4. He will be watching his back for the rest of his life.

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    1. I'm sure you are right! Thank you mimi

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  5. I love the full circle of this... and he better make himself scarce!

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  6. Superbly written
    Click Here to see what Mrs. Dash Says

    Also, I feel the previous layout "Keith's ramblings header" was cleaner

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    1. Thanks DeeDee. Re the header - I agree and I have decided to revert o the old one. Thanks for your input!

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  7. Haha! He sounds like a bit of a psycho, it's probably best for her that he's making a run for it :-)

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    1. That about sums him up! Thanks Alistair

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  8. A gripping take, he better run fast. Well done, Keith ๐Ÿ˜€

    Kittysverses.wordpress.com

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    1. Don't worry, he's gone! Cheers Aishwarya

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  9. Hahaha! Clever, Keith, very clever.

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    1. Most kind of you sir - thanks very much.

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  10. It holds you till the end, and then springs a surprise. The point is, what did he gain? Superb writing!

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    1. A certain amount of satisfaction I guess. Thanks Reena

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  11. LOL You certainly have a diabolical sense of humor hidden under all that talent! :D

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    1. Such flattery! I don't know what to say except thank you of course!

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  12. I agree with another commenter: wicked sense of humour---and you must have talent to make readers sympathize with the MC. Are you by chance a lawyer?๐Ÿ˜‰

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  13. Oh, what a tangled web! Great story.

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  14. The casual indifference of the narrator makes him more dangerous, cold-blooded as they call it . Great character portrayal and story , Keith.

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    1. That will help him get away with it! Thanks so much for your very kind words moon.

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  15. Hope he has a different set of IDs handy. Good take Keith. Loved the way the story built towards the ending.

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    1. So pleased it worked for you Varad. Your generous words are much appreciated.

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  16. Flowers ain't enough. SEnD Ca$H Or El$e

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    1. Wow, I'm not arguing with you - it's on its way!

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  17. I've met a lot of losers in my day, but fortunately none as diabolical as this guy.

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    1. No. Not you. That guy you wrote about. I hope.

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    2. Phew, I thought youi'd found me out!

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  18. Ha! Nice zinger in the end. You made me laugh, and I'm still smiling. Good one!

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  19. hopefully, it was all worth it.

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  20. Wow! Great writing! I'm particularly impressed with "Not for what I did, he deserved it, but for denying it." That tells us so much about both men. While the killer is cold-blooded, he feels that his rival deserved punishment; more than that, he feels that the woman would possibly have agreed with him. It's just a brilliant line, because it crams so much in while being psychologically true. Well done indeed! 

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    1. Thanks you so much Penny.Comments such as yours are so valuable as they confirm that the story had the desired impact, something we often wonder about.

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  21. He better run faster than usain Bolt.

    http://ideasolsi65.blogspot.in/2017/08/prompt-dale-rogerson-she-practiced-neck.html

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    1. Haha! You are so right! Thanks Kalpana

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  22. Great take on the prompt. I wonder if he was able to get away with it!

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  23. Ah, one from the stalker's point-of-view. I like this. Very crisp. You bring out information bit-by-bit. So clever!

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  24. Awesome. I can't really say it better than some of the comments. So much in so few words. Be well!

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    1. Less is more, or so they say. Thanks Darla

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  25. I didn't see that ending coming. I love it. Great writing.

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    1. I couldn't put it better myself! Thanks Dawn

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